Thoughts about Comment

Comments on my stories are the most helpful because people are very friendly in my introduction page.

I honestly like to read those criticize comments in my story posts because they helped me to grow. I know my story is somewhat boring; but when I know how native speakers feel, I have the power to write better stories. Those comments did give me a lot of good ideas about story structure and some other useful skills.

Some of the comments I left to others are criticize comments. I gave them some idea about wording and paragraphing. The rest of my comments focused on praise because most people write better stories than I do; when I left comments, I would remind myself to learn from some writing skills such as direct dialogues and using fancy vocabulary.

I may not have big improvement on commenting since my writing skills limited my ability. I actually want to say a lot, but I cannot because I do not know how to express my emotions. Things will be better if I practice a lot!

Storytelling of Week5: Bhima Fighted Demon

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Bhima and his relatives escaped from the burning palace to a dangerous jungle. When they stepped in to the jungle, a man-eating demon sensed them and decided to eat them all. The demon traced their footprints and finally caught them at a night.

“So long have I waited! I almost forgot the taste of human flesh. You all will be my dinner today!”, the demon said.

“Brothers and sisters, protect you from sneak attacks. I can deal with it alone!”

Bhima has very skillful fight strategies and he has an amazing agility that allows him to dodge almost every strike from the demon. Moreover, Bhima can use his rapid fist to pierce the demon’s hard skin. However Bhima is not toughness in fight; if he is hit heavily, he probably dies for that.

In the other side, the demon has a very strong body, so every strike is deadly. Demon’s body is armored very well. The armor is almost unbeatable, but it does not cover every corner of the demon body; there are still some places are not protected. The demon nevertheless knows any fighting skills; incredible strength and toughness are demon’s weapons.

Demon laughed, “How dare you show your face here, weak human? Look at your flesh. I can barely kill you with one finger!”

“Then try it! I will let you bleed to death!” Bhima yelled confidently.

So the battle began. The demon became very wild in the fight; trees and stones were flying to everywhere. Bhima did not try to fight the demon with frontal assaults; instead, Bhima seized the gaps between the demon’s attacks, and he used his fist to hurt the demon’s unarmored skin. This made the demon to bleed all the time.

The demon suddenly realized Bhima’s plan, so it decided to roll the dice to twist the bad situation.

“You are a formidable, so you are very lucky to see my true power!” the demon yelled.

Then the demon stopped attacking and grew much larger. The armor was gone because the demon was now nearly invincible. Bhima tried few times and he found he could not hurt the demon any more. To protect his relatives, Bhima pretend to be in retreat and he ran into the jungle. The demon was very angry, so it ignored Bhima’s relatives and chased Bhima into the jungle.

Bhima thought that the demon’s transformation cannot last very long and it must have some side effects for such great power gained. Thus, Bhima was trying to buy time and wait for the demon’s exhaust.

The demon unexpectedly felt that power were vanishing from it body; that was a signal that the transformation’s side effect was coming. Therefore, the demon stopped attacking and tried to find an escape way. Bhima was waiting for that moment, so he grasped the valuable time and gave the demon a fatal wound to end its life.

Author's Note:

The story is expanded from the fight between Bhima and demon. I added a lot of setting and details into the fight scenes.

Bibliography:

PDE Mahabharata

Reading Diary B:Public Domain Mahabharata

Today's reading assignment started with a plot that enemies want to burn Bhima and his relatives. After escaping through the underground passage, they are in a dangerous jungle; the jungle is full of wild beasts and man-eater races.

I really enjoy reading the fight between Bhima and demon, but the story did not tell me too much about the details about the fight. I will add more fight scenes in my storytelling if I choose this one as my storytelling this week. Topic from yesterday is also very interesting, and I am not able to combine two stories because they are too diversified. 

I will focus on fighting for today's story and deceptive conversations for yesterday's topic.

Bhima fights with Hidimba

Reading Diary A:Public Domain Mahabharata

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Mahabharata is a completely new story to me; I have never heard about it until I enrolled in this course.

After reading several short stories; I found the Bhishma is a very interesting person. He did not do things following some guidelines; he broke rules to succeed. Bhishma is smart, or cunning in some others’ viewpoints.

For today’s reading, I personally like him especially the Bhishmaat the Swayamvara story. I probably do my storytelling based on this story. I will focus on how Bhishma abducted the three princesses in my storytelling; moreover I may expand the story by adding some more tricks that Bhishma used during his action.