“I lost it just because I was not careful. Would you dare to race with me one more time? I will not take snap again. ” The tortoise agreed. The dare said “Great! See you tomorrow morning.”
The dare woke up very early in the morning because it felt excited to the incoming win. The tortoise was still in its steady slow speed to the race’s starting point. The dare ran at a lighting speed right after the referee announced that the game was beginning. The tortoise fell far behind like the first race, but the dare would not take nap anymore.
When the dare reached at a river, a tiger was asking for help because the tiger accidently dropped its rubber ball into the river. The dare rejected the tiger’s request because the dare did not want to waste time on it; the dare wanted to make sure it can win this game.
After a while, the tortoise was also at the river. The tiger asked the tortoise for help as well. Although the tortoise knew helping the tiger would lower its chance to win this game, the tortoise swam into the river and helped the tiger get his rubber ball. The tiger was very happy, but he noticed that the tortoise was not that happy. He asked the tortoise why, and the tortoise told the tiger about the game. The tiger responded: “Let me take you to the finish line.” In the middle of the race way, the tiger and the tortoise overtook the dare and reached the end much earlier than the dare did. As a result, the tortoise won the second Tortoise and the Hare Race again.
“Thank you for your help, Mr. Tiger,” said tortoise, “I could not win this one without you.”
“No worries, it was not me but you kindness helped you.” The tiger said.
Do
well and have well.
Author's Note
The hare wants to race
with the tortoise again. At this time, the hare would not take nap again and
the tortoise seems to have no chance to win again. However, the tortoise’s kindness
helps it win again.
The change I made is very
big. I created a new race story which is a subsequent storyline of the first
race.
The idea came from “The
Serpent and the Eagle” and “The Tortoise and the Hare”. In the first race, the
hare stopping running during the race because he thought the tortoise had no
opportunity to win. The hare decided to take a nap before the tortoise caught
up with him. However, the hare’s oversleeping and the tortoise’s unremitting
efforts made the tortoise win that race.
The image I selected was
from the first race, but it matter little. In both races the hare was very
confidence at the starting point; and the tortoise was always patient.
I choose this story because
it is a well-known story, so my readers do not have to read the original story
to know what has happened in the past. I want my readers know that kindness is
also a good personality to help us succeed.
This storytelling is not
related to my project, but it is the very beginning of my blogging.
Bibliography
Book: The
Æsop for Children With pictures by Milo Winter
Author: Æsop
Year
Published: December 2, 2006 [EBook #19994]
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ReplyDeleteThis one is funny. The hare thought he was going to be more diligent for the second race and he would have won too. The difference that I like here is that it wasn't the hare's hubris that was his downfall but it was actually the kidness of the tortoise that gave him an advantage and allowed him to actually win the second time. I like it!
ReplyDeleteHi Youhao. Thanks for the helpful comments on my story. I will try to integrate the changes so that my future stories sound better. I will try to help you improve this story as well. I really like this twist to one of my favorite stories from when I was a little kid. This tortoise always teaches good morals such as to work hard, not be cocky, not be selfish, and always try to help others when they need it. There are a couple suggestions I am going to make to make your story better. The major problem in this story is grammar. I think you accidentally used the word “dare” instead of “hare.” I was confused for a bit until I realized that this was just a spelling mistake. Another spelling mistake that made the story confusing was when you said, “snap” instead of “nap” in the first paragraph. Fixing these mistakes will help with the flow and understanding of your story.
ReplyDeleteHey Youhao! This was a really cool twist on the original Tortoise and the Hare story! I am a big believer in kindness, so I thought that the moral of the story was brilliant. Reaching out to help others is a great way to teach the younger generation to help one another instead of competing for petty prizes. Teamwork and cooperation are essential skills in the workforce which begins with the ability to lend a helping hand. I’d like to make a few suggestions for your story! Although the content was great, try rereading your story for grammar mistakes. I believe there are a few spelling errors of “dare” instead of “hare.” I was a bit confused, but then I realized that you meant the hare. This can easily be fixed with a quick proofread and editing. I make spelling mistakes all the time, so I have to reread what I write to fix them! Other than that, it was a nice fable!
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